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Come in, Houston
You’re looking kind of blue
I’d like it if you’d smile
When I’m orbiting you

Do you read me, Houston?
Won’t you send me a sign
A quick communication
To say that we’re fine
[Won’t you say that we’re fine?]

I hope this new mission
Is okay by you
Let me run through the checklist
Of what I’m gonna do

I’m gonna carve our names in moon dust
And sing you to sleep
I’ll name a comet for you
Babe, they don’t come cheap
And when it drifts around the sun
To come into sight
You’ll know that I love you tonight

Satellite to Houston
I’m still up in space
I’m far too lost in love
How are things at the base?

Do you read me, Houston?
Read me loud and clear?
I tend to get nervous
When your support isn’t here
[Won’t you always stay here?]

I’m glad this new mission
Is okay by you
Let me run through the checklist
Of what we’re gonna do

We’re gonna carve our names in moon dust
I’ll sing you to sleep
I’ll name a comet for you
Babe, they don’t come cheap
And when it drifts around the sun
To come into sight
You’ll know we’re in love here tonight
:iconchibi-shuriken:

Author's Comments

Welll. This is what happens when you combine me, the new Star Trek movie, one in the morning, and a cheesy little tune. :giggle:

I thought it was kind of cute, so I figured I'd upload it for a little critique/feedback and such.

I'd really like to write more. I'd really like to do a lot of things more, really.

Let me know what you all think! :heart:

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:iconxerces:
oh nice job! i love the rhyme scheme and the flow to it. it runs really well when i say it in my head. some fantastic imagery too :-)

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:icontoms32:
Beatiful. Just Beautiful. I really love this ^^ Now you just have to give it some music in background :D

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:iconcoldfalafel:
sooo cute. :D you definitely should write more.
:iconvannvidd:
Awww, so cute and such a great rhyme scheme! Nice work, I love the imagry and the repitition. :+fav:
:iconchibi-shuriken:
Thank youuu! :heart:
I was terrified of making it rhyme, because last time I tried to make anything rhyme, it was really cheesy. >.>

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Never take life seriously - nobody gets out alive anyway.

Icon by ~louiecablouie! :heart:
:iconchibi-shuriken:
Thank you sooo much! ^^
I would love to figure out a little riff to play on my guitar to this. That would be so fun! :D

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Never take life seriously - nobody gets out alive anyway.

Icon by ~louiecablouie! :heart:
:iconchibi-shuriken:
Thank you! :D I really appreciate it! :heart:

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Never take life seriously - nobody gets out alive anyway.

Icon by ~louiecablouie! :heart:
:iconchibi-shuriken:
:giggle:
Thank you so much! :D
I was really afraid of making it rhyme, so I'm glad you think it worked out in the end. ^^

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Never take life seriously - nobody gets out alive anyway.

Icon by ~louiecablouie! :heart:
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i love how it flows so smoothly.
if i try to make anything rhyme it comes out so horrible i cringe. xD

I’m gonna carve our names in moon dust
And sing you to sleep
I’ll name a comet for you
Babe, they don’t come cheap
And when it drifts around the sun
To come into sight
You’ll know that I love you tonight


<33 that killed me. (in the non-dead kind of way, of course)


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i'm outdated, overrated
morning seems so far away.

so i'll sing a melody

your lullaby for all the times
hoping that my voice can get it right.

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